Friday Fictioneers 2–The Eyes Have It

Posted: March 7, 2013 in Friday Fictioneers, Writing
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This is story #2, based on the same picture as yesterday’s “official” entry into the Friday Fictioneers weekly go-round.  It’s also science-fiction, something I don’t do often (at least I hope it’s science fiction, at least for now.)  Link to the other stories is at the end of yesterday’s story: https://sustainabilitea.wordpress.com/2013/03/06/friday-fictioneers-2084/.

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The Eyes Have It

It just slipped out, but They heard everything, often maliciously giving you what you asked for.

He’d been tired of not knowing whether someone was lying or simply telling him what they thought he wanted to hear.  He wished to know what was really meant.

Waking briefly on the table before being put under again, it seemed a dream.  But once, home he’d suddenly seen the lack of love in his wife’s eyes, looked into those of his children, observed their indifference.

A horrified glance in the mirror revealed the depths of his soul.

He saw truth.

He knew despair.

Comments
  1. I wonder how many of us could comfortably look at the depths of our souls?

  2. deanabo says:

    Very thought provoking.

  3. […] Friday Fictioneers 2–The Eyes Have It […]

  4. billgncs says:

    doesn’t sound like they are taking a vote — all in favor aye!

  5. julespaige says:

    I remember Memorex….Chilling. But then I am a Sci-fi fan…
    Thanks for your visit.

  6. Sarah Ann says:

    Really enjoyed both your stories this week. I thought I preferred this one, but on re-reading the first one I can’t decide now. Great work on both and well done for doing something different this week.

  7. Love the concept, love the writing.

  8. Dear Janet,
    Would I be correct in assuming that “They” is capitalized for a reason? As in Big Brother…Them…You-Know-Who? Another good one. Creepy, chilling and too potentially real. (I preferred the first one).
    shalom,
    Rochelle

    • You are correct about They be capitalized for a reason. I’m glad you enjoyed the story (both the stories). Hope your Friday is off to a good start (and that’s not fiction.)

      janet

  9. elmowrites says:

    ooh, I enjoyed both but this was my favourite – very dark and interesting. I love how the hardest person to look in the eye was himself!

  10. tedstrutz says:

    Chilling… took another read… chilling.

    • Hey, thanks for reading both and commenting. I’m glad you liked them both. I vacillated between the two and finally decided this might be the best way as I’m only posting one but people can read both if they like. I think that knowing what everyone really felt would be devastating on many levels and having Them grant “wishes” would be even more so.

      janet

  11. Joe Owens says:

    I am not sure if I know what to think about this. It is good, but just a lot creepy.

  12. k~ says:

    Ouch. The reflection can often be enlightening.

  13. kz says:

    definitely loved this one better..or prolly coz i didn’t know what memorex was..lol great story

    • You’re much too young for Memorex. Memorex was a brand of cassette tapes–long ago precursors to CD’s. I used them to show that some small part of him was aware of what was being done to him but it was all in his subconscious.

  14. It reminded me of the cold war anecdotes we’d hear about the communists, who listened to everything but told nothing, where you couldn’t reveal your real innermost thoughts because you never knew who other people really were – nice

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