Friday Fictioneers–Italian lessons

Posted: July 17, 2013 in Friday Fictioneers, Poetry
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Friday Fictioneers. 100 words. Fun. Addictive. No known cure.

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Italian Lessons

Lake Como languishes under summer sun,
        streets so narrow side mirrors risk their lives 
        and buses stop traffic
        lurching back and forth while rounding corners.

Cool gelato slides down grateful throats.
Ferries crisscross quiescent waters
	past stately, hidden villas	
	with magazine-ready gardens.

We brave torturous cobbles
	up steep slopes
	past tiny shops
	with sometimes dusty windows,
Relax with espressos at metal tables in the shade.

Bright jersey-ed cyclists with muscled calves fly by
	as juice runs down my fingers
	from sweet, prosciutto-wrapped melon.

You lick the juice,
	your smile promising more sweetness
	yet to come in our fan-cooled, shuttered room.

Comments
  1. Sandra says:

    Hot or what? πŸ™‚ Nicely done, great imagery.

  2. brainsnorts says:

    those last two lines were very unexpected, in a very good way.

  3. annesquared says:

    Suddenly I am interested in going to Italy…

    • Haha! I suggest taking your own someone with you, although there are plenty men there willing to help. When I visited there years ago, it was with my s-i-l and while we had a great time, it wasn’t anything like the last part of my story. πŸ™‚ Now if I could go again with Bill…

      janet

      • annesquared says:

        Yes, I would, Janet πŸ™‚ lmao.
        My trips tend to land me in countries that have no refrigeration, unpredictable electricity, and a functioning bicycle is transportation for a family of 7.
        You are an excellent writer and I was caught up in the moment πŸ˜‰
        I’m thinking it is time for me to return to the hedonistic ways of my youth. πŸ˜€

  4. vbholmes says:

    Great description of a gorgeous part of the world–love the excitement of Italy as a whole. So alive, and you’ve captured it.

  5. summerstommy2 says:

    Excellent poem Janet. Lovely imagery.

  6. rckjones says:

    Good poem. Made me feel homesick for Italy. 😦

  7. misskzebra says:

    Really beautiful language here, you make the most of the word limit.

  8. Joe Owens says:

    Janet I hope to get to Italy someday. My father was in the U.S. Navy and did a Mediterranean tour. I have some of his 8mm movies from the early 1960s that I plan to convert to DVD and hope the images survive the transfer process.

  9. billgncs says:

    I’ll be right home πŸ™‚

  10. Wanderer says:

    Beautifully written.

  11. Tom Poet says:

    This is a really great poem. BY far my favorite from you. Filled with imagery, texture and perfect rhythm. I love it. Well done is an understatement. Loved every line of it.

  12. Bastet says:

    Very well written and yes…it’s lousy hot here in Trentino too!

  13. Bastet says:

    Where does one find the Daily Fictioneers?

  14. Linda Vernon says:

    Your words put me right there in the hot summer sun. Such a smooth and easy read!

    • Thanks, Linda. I think a lot of us are in the hot summer sun right now. It’s hotter here than in Arizona where my parents live and the humidity here is terrible. Back to my iced tea and trying to catch up a bit on my FF reading.

      janet

  15. paulmclem says:

    Any story featuring melon has to be worth a read. Nice job.

  16. kz says:

    beautiful, made me smile. and i loved the sensuality in the end! πŸ™‚

  17. zookyworld says:

    Fantastic pictures — this was like a postcard where you described it so well, I felt like I was there. And the heat continues with that touch of sensuality at the end.

    • I’m glad you felt that way as I was imagining what I remembered about it in my head as I wrote although, as I mentioned in another comment, the last bit was pure writer’s license. πŸ™‚

      janet

  18. 95 and up here so I really found your story cool.

  19. This isn’t Italian but – ooh la la that ending!

    And the earlier part – yes, that’s Italy! Very nice Molto bello!

  20. Honie Briggs says:

    Janet, I truly love this. The descriptive language reminds me of being blissed out in Italy last fall. The rhythm and tone, both exceptional.

  21. claireful says:

    Incredibly sensuous writing. Lovely.

  22. Hi Janet,
    Wow, what a sensual treat of a story. Great descriptions, puts me right there, and that last line makes the imagination go wild! Great writing. I have a feeling this has to be from experience, autobiographical. I want to read the next 100 words. Ron

    • Ron, everything but the last bit was from my real trip to Lake Como with one of my s-i-l’s some years ago. Bill says I can’t share the next hundred words. πŸ™‚ Lake Como was the first place I ever tasted proscuitto and melon and it was divine.

      janet

  23. Dear Janet,

    You had me with “streets so narrow side mirrors risk their lives” and didn’t let me go until the end. A lovely, vivid poem. You are an adept word painter.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

  24. Gabriella says:

    Lovely evocation of the Italian lake and town. Melon is good but Italian gelati are unique.

  25. mithriluna says:

    Janet – I love this! My husband and I went to Italy a couple years ago for our 25th. You have really caught the essence of the beautiful and very romantic country. And those last two lines…oo la la! Definitely how I remember Italy!! *wink* πŸ™‚

  26. Brings back beautiful memories of my brief time in Rome… Except for the incredibly vivid, sensual last stanza. I was probably 10 or 11 at the time, and thus a bit young for anything so mature. However, I don’t doubt that such things were going on all around me, while I was completely ignorant. πŸ˜‰

    • Hannah, as far as I’m concerned, at 10 or 11, it would be great if all children were clueless about these types of things. Everyone knows everything much too early now, when they have no good framework for dealing with any of it. Glad you enjoyed the poem, though. πŸ™‚

      janet

  27. Penny L Howe says:

    Outstandingly delicious, your words were edible all of them! πŸ™‚

  28. petrujviljoen says:

    Well well Done!

  29. Helena Hann-Basquiat says:

    you had me at prosciutto-wrapped melon, darling. Lovely imagery here. Well done!

  30. hmv says:

    Wonderfully vivid and beautiful! I’ve never been to Italy (or out of the USA for that matter), but your imagery was so great, I saw everything so clearly, I could swear that I had been…

  31. Kent says:

    Excellent, “Ja’net” just great. Make me wish I were in Italy. I have never been.

  32. Really lovely poetry — not a gift I have for sure. Enjoyed reading it, several times in fact!

    • We all have different styles of writing, Perry, and you’ve found your niche. I’m glad you enjoyed the poetry and the fact that you read it more than once is in itself a compliment (unless it would have been because you didn’t understand it.) πŸ™‚

      janet

  33. troy P. says:

    Wow, Janet.

    That’s pretty much it, just Wow!

  34. denmother says:

    The imagery is beautiful here. I feel the anticipation of what’s to come in the room. You’ve drawn a perfect picture leading up to it.

    • I can’t claim it was the heat wave that caused my thoughts to to this way because when I wrote it, we weren’t sitting in 90-degree plus temperatures. πŸ™‚ But I’m glad you enjoyed the trip to Italy. Keep cool and have a wonderful weekend. I’ll be doing some more reading myself after taking a walk and a shower. Ran out early to get organic strawberries at Whole Foods for $1.99/lb. Now to the real business of the day. πŸ™‚

      janet

  35. annisik51 says:

    It’s hot enough here in ‘The Garden of England’ without this. My hills and vales are scorched.

    • We’re scorching over here, too, Ann, with no relief in sight, although it may drop below 90 F tomorrow. That’s not including the heat index. The humidity is terrible. Thankfully we have AC and ceiling fans. Don’t use the AC much but this is certainly the time to use it. Hope you get a break soon!

      I’ll be by to read your story sometime today. Enjoy the weekend.

      janet

  36. unspywriter says:

    Ooh, very sensual. I could taste that prosciutto-wrapped melon. Lovely verse and a very visual “trip.”

    Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/band-of-brothers/

  37. That was a very beautiful piece, melodious and detailed in such a poetic way. And evocative – that I have been there, or could be there now…

  38. Beautifully captured the images and even the feeling of a lovely summer day, thank you for that!

  39. elappleby says:

    Great stuff. I loved the magazine-ready gardens πŸ˜€

  40. Janet what a perfect atmosphere you created here… I wan’t to go to Italy πŸ™‚

  41. rgayer55 says:

    The thing about great writing is it takes you to places you might never be able to visit in person. You carried us there today, and I really loved the romantic ending. Well done!

  42. Dee says:

    Hi Janet – loved your poem. A perfect description of some of the small towns and villages in Italy, John always says “breathe in” as we pull in wing mirrors and attempt to negotiate narrow lanes.You created some lovely images and a very sensual atmosphere.
    (I did try to comment on Saturday but got a “sorry your comment cannot be posted” message, hope i manage better this time)
    Dee

    • It worked and thanks for persisting! So happy you enjoyed the story and found it realistic. Fortunately, I wasn’t driving but sometimes the side mirrors barely missed the oncoming ones and there were large mirrors at many intersections so you could see ’round the corners. πŸ™‚

      janet

  43. rheath40 says:

    Oh Janet, yours is my favorite. I read your story with every one of my senses.

    • I thought you might like it, Renee, but your favorite? That’s high praise indeed. Thanks so much. πŸ™‚

      janet

      • rheath40 says:

        Please Janet. I’m just a silly romance writer. Your story was romance to the nth degree. πŸ™‚ Steamy without being dirty. Couldn’t you just imagine the rest of the story? Of course you could, because it’s your story.

        Renee

      • I find that imagination is the best romance and erotica, so when I write this type of thing, I like to suggest and then let the reader take it where he or she will. Probably just as well in some instances that I don’t know where that is!! πŸ™‚

        janet

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