Lightning slashes clouds
Grey skies hemorrhage water
Lights blossom in homes
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Birds ruffle feathers
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Dinner is cooking
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I curl in a chair
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Music on the roof
Lightning slashes clouds
Grey skies hemorrhage water
Lights blossom in homes
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Birds ruffle feathers
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Dinner is cooking
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I curl in a chair
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Music on the roof
Hi Janet,
Is that your house? Nice Haiku.
Aloha,
Doug
It’s the house next door, but very like our rental house. Glad you liked the haiku and that you dropped in.
Have a wonderful day,
janet
i like the music ending. it turns a negative into a positive.
Very visual especially since it’s raining here.
Here, too, and doesn’t look like it will stop any time soon, although if it gets cold enough, it may turn to snow.
They are promising some by Saturday.
We had a few moments of snow, now back to rain. Some snow in the forecast but hopefully not bad, since I have to drive for six hours.
I like the original the best.
Scott
I like the dinner cooking best. It has a nice element of break of thought between the second and third lines. The original is nice, but I try to avoid alliteration in haiku (just like rhymes).
I truly respect anyone who can create such harmony with so few words. The ways of the haiku have always eluded me… But this is inspiring!