Storm–a haiku with alternate endings

Posted: January 30, 2013 in Nature, Photos, Poetry
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Lightning slashes clouds
Grey skies hemorrhage water
Lights blossom in homes

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Birds ruffle feathers

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Dinner is cooking

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I curl in a chair

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Music on the roof

Comments
  1. dmmacilroy says:

    Hi Janet,

    Is that your house? Nice Haiku.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  2. rich says:

    i like the music ending. it turns a negative into a positive.

  3. Very visual especially since it’s raining here.

  4. I like the original the best.
    Scott

  5. I like the dinner cooking best. It has a nice element of break of thought between the second and third lines. The original is nice, but I try to avoid alliteration in haiku (just like rhymes).

  6. I truly respect anyone who can create such harmony with so few words. The ways of the haiku have always eluded me… But this is inspiring!